Tattoo-like Sensor Developed by Scientists

 Tattoo-like Sensor Developed by Scientists

***The original sentence seemed like it was taken from the middle of a sentence. It seemed awkward. So, I tried to liven it up some.; Scientists Developed Wearable Sensor Tattoo

Scientists have developed a new body sensor that has the ability to monitor body temperature and muscle activity.
***I rewrote the sentence using your words. I made your ending the beginning and made the beginning the end. This way the sentence is more understandable to the reader.; Monitoring body temperature and muscle activity, there is a new sensory developed by scientists.

This new sensor is very thin and people cannot even feel the existence of the devices on the skin, according to Professor Takao Someya of the University of Tokyo.
***In this sentence, I wanted to add a quote from one of the people who helped develop it to add credit.; This new sensor is very thin and feels like nothing after being applied.

The current sensors irritate the skin causing redness and itching while the new sensor can be applied similarly to temporary tattoos: by dampening the patch with water and applying it onto the skin.
*** I combined this sentence with the one that follows, they can easily make one sentence that compares and contrasts the new and old sensors.; The current wearable sensors irritate the skin causing redness and itching. This new senor can be applied similar to the children's temporary tattoos:by spraying water on the patch and sticking it onto the skin.

It also allows the skin to breathe, preventing irritation, by molding and adapting into the skin.

This breakthrough may soon be used to control prosthetics by electric muscle signals and monitor patients to see their progress.

Source-https://www.nytimes.com/2017/07/20/health/breathable-wearable-sensor-temporary-tattoo.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health&region=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=2&pgtype=sectionfront 
Edited by Michael Morrow


Tattoo-like Sensor Developed by Scientists

Scientists have developed a new body sensor that has the ability to monitor body temperature and muscle activity. This new sensor is very thin and people cannot even feel the existence of the devices on the skin, according to Professor Takao Someya of the University of Tokyo. The current sensors irritate the skin causing redness and itching while the new sensor can be applied similarly to temporary tattoos: by dampening the patch with water and applying it onto the skin. It also allows the skin to breathe, preventing irritation, by molding and adapting into the skin. This breakthrough may soon be used to control prosthetics by electric muscle signals and monitor patients to see their progress.

Source-https://www.nytimes.com/2017/07/20/health/breathable-wearable-sensor-temporary-tattoo.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health&region=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=2&pgtype=sectionfront

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