Couple Found in Glacier After Years of Searching

 Couple Found in Glacier After Years of Searching


75 years ago, Marcelin and Francine Dumoulin disappeared in the Alps in August 1942 leaving their seven children to be separated into different families.
***To have the main piece of the sentence to flow easily without pause, I moved the phrase "for 75 years" to the beginning of the sentence. Also, any number nine or lower is to be spelled out. Normally, numbers 10 and up are represented by their numerical symbol unless it is a percent.; Marcelin and Francine Dumoulin disappeared, for 75 years, in the Alps in August 1942 leaving their 7 children to be separated into different families.

Encased in a glacier, the couple was found with their shoes, backpacks, tin bowls and a glass bottle by a worker from a ski lift company.
***I think this is a good sentence to mention that the couple was inside of a glacier seeing that it was not brought up in the passage besides the title.; The couple was found with their shoes, backpacks, tin bowls and a glass bottle by a worker from a ski lift company.

Marceline Udry-Dumoulin and her siblings never gave up hope when looking for her parents, climbing the glacier 3 times to search for them.

Marceline decided to finally host a funeral for her parents while wearing white instead of black to represent the hope she never lost.
***I removed the last three words from the sentence, you got the idea known without them. I added "while" just to give a transition from one idea to the next.; Marceline decided to finally host a funeral for her parents wearing white instead of black to represent the hope she never lost for her parents.

She said, "I can say that after 75 years of waiting this news gives me a deep sense of calm."
***You can remove "that" from the sentence. You can keep that the comma behind "said." If you wanted to keep "that" in, you could remove the comma.; She said that, "I can say that after 75 years of waiting this news gives me a deep sense of calm."

Multiple bodies that have been lost in the Alps are being discovered due to the rise in global temperature melting the ice.

Source-http://www.bbc.com/news/world-europe-40645745
Edited by Michael Morrow


Couple Found in Glacier After Years of Searching

75 years ago, Marcelin and Francine Dumoulin disappeared in the Alps in August 1942 leaving their seven children to be separated into different families. Encased in a glacier, the couple was found with their shoes, backpacks, tin bowls and a glass bottle by a worker from a ski lift company. Marceline Udry-Dumoulin and her siblings never gave up hope when looking for her parents, climbing the glacier 3 times to search for them. Marceline decided to finally host a funeral for her parents while wearing white instead of black to represent the hope she never lost. She said, "I can say that after 75 years of waiting this news gives me a deep sense of calm." Multiple bodies that have been lost in the Alps are being discovered due to the rise in global temperature melting the ice.

Source-http://www.bbc.com/news/world-europe-40645745

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