Virtual Reality Therapy

 Virtual Reality Therapy


Dr. Dawn Jewell, a psychologist, is treating a patient that was a victim of a car crash through virtual reality by using exposure therapy to revisit the site of the crash.

This is made possible by a service called Limbix which is provided through daydream view on the new Google headset.
***I added a much-needed transition between "Limbix" and "provided." Also, I capitalized "Google" because it is a proper noun, a name of a company.; This is made possible by a service called Limbix provided through daydream view on the new google headset.

During this process, the patient will be able to describe to their psychologist their thoughts and feelings on the topic.
***I put a comma after "process" to signify the end of the introductory phrase.; During this process the patient will be able to describe to their psychologist their thoughts and feelings on the topic.

People can face their problems through this new technology by virtually experiencing situations that may trigger their fears or addictions.

This technology has been developing for the past two decades using research and clinical trials to further advance virtual reality.

Using these new advancements, the patients will be engaged emotionally, forcing them to face these traumas and practice real life experiences in a safe environment; However, this technology is far from perfect at the moment.
***I added a comma behind "emotionally" and another behind "however." Plus, I lower cased "however" because words after the semicolon aren't supposed to capitalized; Using these new advancements, the patients will be engaged emotionally forcing them to face these traumas and practice real life experiences in a safe environment; However this technology is far from perfect at the moment.

Source-https://www.nytimes.com/2017/07/30/technology/virtual-reality-limbix-mental-health.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health&region=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=8&pgtype=sectionfront
Edited by Michael Morrow


Virtual Reality Therapy

Dr. Dawn Jewell, a psychologist, is treating a patient that was a victim of a car crash through virtual reality by using exposure therapy to revisit the site of the crash. This is made possible by a service called Limbix which is provided through daydream view on the new Google headset. During this process, the patient will be able to describe to their psychologist their thoughts and feelings on the topic. People can face their problems through this new technology by virtually experiencing situations that may trigger their fears or addictions. This technology has been developing for the past two decades using research and clinical trials to further advance virtual reality. Using these new advancements, the patients will be engaged emotionally, forcing them to face these traumas and practice real life experiences in a safe environment; However, this technology is far from perfect at the moment.

Source-https://www.nytimes.com/2017/07/30/technology/virtual-reality-limbix-mental-health.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fhealth&action=click&contentCollection=health&region=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=8&pgtype=sectionfront

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